In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as a valuable work experience. discuss both opinions and give your opinion

Engaging children in some kind of paid work is a common practise in many countries. While a good number of people consider

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to be totally wrong, others view it to be very beneficial. In my opinion,

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consider

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to be less beneficial as it denies the

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the right to education and exposes them to abuse. On the one hand, children involved in paid works are usually unable to pursue their academic dreams as they spend most of the productive time of the day doing these works. To illustrate, a recent study in Africa showed that a greater percentage of school

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someone who quits school before graduation

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are the ones engaged in paid

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work

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, some employees blatantly deny these children access to

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school, thus

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impeding on the children's educational rights.

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, it exposes

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children to the risk of abuse as some even live with their employees.

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, a recent occurrence in my

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where an employee sexually abuses the little

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working for him and threatens to kill her on any attempt to reveal it to anyone.

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grossly affected the

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's personality in a negative way as she persistently lives in fear and withdrawal.

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, children could engage in paid services as a way of rendering financial help to their families. Here, the

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does

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works at leisure and the

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ploughed back to the family.

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boosts the

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's self esteem as a feeling of fulfilment in

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generating

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is achieved. To sum up, children engaging in paid work is a common practise recently,

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could yield

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financially

for the family,

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believe it is completely wrong as

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children are denied their

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educations

right and exposed to sexual abuse.