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As global trade increases, many goods, including those we use on a daily basis, are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distances. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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With the rise in global trade, it becomes pertinent to transport frequently used products produced in other countries across far distances.
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 perceive to be a negative development as it poses more demerits than merits.
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, Conveying daily used products across far distances, leads to inflation in the price of
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 goods.
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, locally made products are much affordable than those from other countries due to the extra cost of importation.
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 affects
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the economy
 of the nation.
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, gradual death of local industries is bound to ensue with persistent indulgence in
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 act. The demise of a famous Auto mobile industry in my country is a typical example of
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 increases a country's dependence on foreign goods.
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, despite the outlined drawbacks, moving goods across countries helps generate a certain degree of revenue for the exporting nation. To conclude, The amount of funds regenerated through trading goods across countries appears much insignificant when compared to the resulting benefits of boosting local industries to produce
same goods
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the same goods
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