Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. why do many working people not get enough exercice? what can be done abot this problem?

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Maintaining a healthy lifestyle, proved to be difficult for working people. Statistic shows, that working people suffer from several health issues throughout time, due to lack of exercises. So what
prevent
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prevents
is preventing
has prevented
employee
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the employee
an employee
employees
from working out?
and
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And
what can be done to answer
this
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problem?
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firstly
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Firstly
, it is
notworthy
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not worthy
that poor time management, is the
bigest
above average in size or number or quantity or magnitude or extent
biggest
hindrance to maintain a healthy life. Working people face great difficulty balancing work and adopting healthy habits like sport, which will
inavitably
in such a manner as could not be otherwise
inevitably
lead to
healthissues
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health issues
such
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as diabetes, blood pressure,
cardioviscular
of or pertaining to or involving the heart and blood vessels
cardiovascular
deseasesn
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and obesity. Futhermore, heavy workload will eventually suck of the employee energy.
Thus
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, after work, people are too tired to think or do some
exercices
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
exercise
and barely manage to finish
housecourse
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a house course
house course
the house course
and taking care of the family.
Also
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,
inspite
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in spite
of being able to include
exercice
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
exercises
in their daily routine, people are not that motivated to
workout
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work out
for two
reasons namely
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reasons, namely
: expensive gyms and lack of
exercice
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
exercises
places at home.
Nevertheless
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, the above said is true, no excuse is acceptable in regards of our health. Working people can find innovative means to do some physical activities without
sacreficing
endure the loss of
sacrificing
their time, nor searching for the adequate place. It is more than enough, to alter our routine like walking to
workplace
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workplaces
the workplace
or home
instead
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of taking the bus, choosing the stairs over elevators, or doing some minor physical during lunch break. To conclude,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
strongly believe that our health is important,
therfore
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
therefore
it is mandatory to maintain a good one and extends our lifespan to better enjoy our lives.
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