• Many parents today organize extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do or do you feel children have enough education at school?

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It is true that nowadays most parents hire private teachers for their children outside the
school
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children have been provided sufficient knowledge at
school
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and the parents should not arrange educators for their children after
school
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.A good reason why children do not need to prepare with private tutors is that it causes unnecessary burden on pupils.
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after 8 hours studying at
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children may feel tired or exhausted and they do not have
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the energy
to do something.Another example is that If pupils prepare the lessons with private tutors in fatigue condition
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the parents can waste not only their money but
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their children’s time and health.
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if children spend their time on their
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favourite
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of extra lessons
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children can develop their creative and social skills or abilities.
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nowadays most schools
are not just educated
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are not just educating
do not just educate
does not just educate
children in the
science languages
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science, languages
and mathematics
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they
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develop their creative and social abilities.For
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they do not need to hire extra teachers.
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instead
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of spending money on private teachers
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parents can spend their money on the other needs of children.
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parents can buy them a lot of books which can enrich their
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or can make them broad-minded or parents can take their children to the many museums and galleries where they can learn a lot of interesting facts about history and famous people.In conclusion
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children do not need to prepare with private teachers because all professional teachers teach
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the pupilsvarious kind
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pupilsvarious kinds
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provide children with a good education.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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