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"It is sometimes argued that too many students go to university, while others claim that a university education should be a universal right. Discuss both sides of the argument and give your own opinion

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There are two different opinions about getting a
university
education
 among
people
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the people
. Some believe that tertiary
education
 is everyone’ right while others think the
university
 is chosen by many pupils. I
believe
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believe, although
although
 having advantages of experience and more formal
education
, graduating a
university
 is not the only way to obtain a better career in the future. In terms of some subjects
such
 as medicine, engineering or
education
, one should enrol
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
university
 and have the training through formal
education
 to be eligible for the job. There is no other way if someone would like to pursue these careers. To give a
more clear
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clearer
 explanation, being a qualified doctor requires 6 years of medical
education
 before gaining to
right
produce a literary work
write
 for registration as an MD.
Furthermore
, before practising in medicine, you should have
theorical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
 knowledge.
On the other hand
, these requirements not a must for every job.
Therefore
, students can choose their
career starting
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career, starting
 from secondary school and decide whether they want to have a career which is obtained
by
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from
university
education
 or not.
For instance
, mechanics or technicians need vocational training rather than graduate or post-graduate diplomas.
Moreover
, being a real work environment at earlier ages give a better experience
instead
 of having a higher
education
 later.
For instance
, in Turkey, hairdressers start working after secondary
school which
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school, which
 result in enough experience at adult age. In conclusion, what is more valuable these days as opposed to having a
university
 diploma is to expertise in whatever you carry on and update yourself about your
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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