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You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter introduce yourself explain what is wrong with the furniture say what action you would like the landlord to take

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Dear
Mr.
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 Smith, I am writing
this
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 letter to talk about a series of problems that make
impossible
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it impossible
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 to spend other days of our holidays here. I am Sahar, who talked to you
for
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about
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 short- term rental
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of you
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you
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your
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 apartment
last
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 week. I visited the advertisement
of
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 your home when I was surfing on
net
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 to find suitable accommodation for my family that are coming from Iran to spend their holiday here with me. After I paid the cost of renting by my internet bank account, I took the keys
of
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home
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the home
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 from
home
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the home
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 agency. It is only a week that we have been living here but there are several
problem
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about
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with
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furniture
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the furniture
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.
First
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 and foremost, the furniture is out of
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dated
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date
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 and very messy so that we are disinclined to use them.
Secondly
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, the electrician utilities
such
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 as wireless telephone and television are mostly down. The
last
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 but not least, the living room is very dingy. The walls and windows need renovating and painting. Due to reasons I mentioned above, we are reluctant to stay here for
residue
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the residue
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 of my family's holiday and we decided to move on more comfortable accommodation, So I want the full refund of the amount paid. Dealing in mind the circumstance I trust you will kindly accept my request. I am waiting for your response.
your
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 sincerely, Sahar
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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