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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world #image #photograph #film #word
Twenty-
first
 century is a new flash point of the globe. Nearly all people have one cell phone in hand. I totally agree that digital pictures or videos are turning to be an effective
way
 of
communicating but
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communicating, but
 written words are still the most important
way
 of communicating in human society. Photographs, films and videos are dominant in our
Iphone
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iPhone
IPhone
Phone
 or Samsung Galaxy.
Ladies
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The ladies
 took selfie to show their pretty new hairstyle and uploaded to Twitter and Facebook. Wow! Many “thumbs up” were collected and thousands of “Likes” were shown
on
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in
 her page’s headline. People enjoyed
this
 lifestyle and
therefore
 photos and videos attracted millions audiences than the written words. Another applause is given to
Youtube which
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YouTube, which
YouTube which
 is the most influential video sharing applications in the world. People love watching
Youtube
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YouTube
 that
make
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makes
 you access to any information
such
 as K-pop stars, Hollywood singers, news, academic tutorials and even cooking receipts. All walks of life communicating relies on the images.
That is
true but
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true, but
 just
party
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a party
 of the story. Words are still an important channel of human communication.
For example
, students learnt knowledge from symbols, characters, numbers
to
being one more than one
two
 sentences.
Moreover
, companies stated the terms in sections, while
statements and
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statements, and
 lawful agreements are illustrated
in
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with
 tables and paragraphs. Knowledge, information and rules are all delivered through books, published materials and newspaper. To conclude, I party
agree
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agrees
 that powerful
way
 of communications could be delivered
by
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with
 images and videos while
words
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the words
 are still the most efficient and effective
way
 of communicating
in
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with
 human society.
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