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some people say that it is individual responsibility to protect the environment while others say it is the government's primary role. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The protection responsibility of
environment
 is debatable. Some people believes that saving
environment
 from dust, pollution is every
individuals
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individual's
individual
individuals'
 role while others do not, they say that it is up to
government
 to secure our surroundings from
such
 things.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why
this
 duty has to be shared between both officials and citizens.
the
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The
first
 group says, habitat is shaped by families living together in the same and specific areas where every individual has to take
this
 as a task to protect his area. It should be added in parent’s job to teach their children how to treat
society
.
For instance
, there is
friend
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a friend
 of mine named Ahmad, who belongs to the same group of people with the same belief. What he does? He carries a plastic bag with himself every morning from home to work whatever he sees
in
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on
road side
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the road side
road sides
 or pathways he drops it
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 plastic. While
on the other hand
, the other group they have difference in their opinion and beliefs. They count
government
 as responsible entity to protect
society
 and
environment
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the environment
.
Government
 as department
for
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of
 each city as municipality which receives
monthly allowance
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a monthly allowance
 from
government
 for the purpose of taking care the
society
 and cleaning it as their job. And
this
 is their job to actively take care of these things in
environment
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the environment
an environment
.
Finally
, my own view on who should be responsible for safeguarding our
society
. I believe that
government
 and peoples are intra connected with each other they have the same amount of responsibility in everything.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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