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Weddings are more expensive in many countries nowadays when compared to the past . What is the reason behind this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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The essay will discuss how
much
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many
 people spending money nowadays for getting married
in contrast
 to how quite expensive was a marriage in the
recently
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recent
 past.
Firstly
, the essay will argue the origin of
this
 phenomenon, it will ask for because of the passage from a simple celebration to a sumptuous one's.
Then
, the essay
will clear
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cleared
 up about the advantages and disadvantages of getting married in the past or doing it at the present time. In the nearly past, a wedlock symbolized an agreement between two persons but
also
 between their respective families. Sometimes, the wedding was a love story, but frequently it was dictated by economic issues. Currently, getting married is perceived as an unnecessary fact for people, in fact not everyone gets married.
However
, in
this
 age, is becoming increasingly to show the own economic status
to
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in
 the society so wedding parties could be very lavish. Positive perspective to these different ways of matrimony could be on one side the easiness of a simple life in the past, to just know what have
to be happen
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happened
 in our life in every moment, not to worry about other things; on the other side, currently, a benefit could be to have gained the possibility to decide to get married or not, to be able to choose freely for
owns
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owning
 life's. Disadvantages for the past marriage was just the constrain of the bond, that could carried suffering in the lifetime.
Instead
 now the problem could be the frustration of not being able to pay high sums required for a proper event. In summary, getting married is an important part of our lives
therefore
 it should be faced with freedom to choose, as well as with freedom of expression. Expensive or cheap is not really important if it will be the realized dream
from
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of
 a couple in love.
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