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Some people think that it would be better for large companies to move to regional areas outside large urban centres. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is thought by some that conglomerates and industries should shift their base to outskirts
instead
 of being based
at
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on
 the centres of cities.
This
 essay will argue that the advantages of
this
 outweighs the drawbacks.
This
 essay will
first
 demonstrate that
this
 shift leads to proper
population
 distribution and
also
 stimulates
development
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the development
 of remote areas, followed by an analysis of how the primary drawback, namely
increase
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the increase
 of cost for company, is not valid. The main reason why
corporates
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corporations
corporate
 or industries should shift to remote areas is that it promotes balanced
population
 density of the areas.
That is
 to say that if companies have their presence in remote areas people will not move to cities in search of a job. A recent statistics report revealed a 28% relocation decline in
area
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the area
 since the jobs had been made available
at
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in
 their hometown.
Moreover
, companies having their presence in far-flung areas
leads
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lead
 to overall
development
 of those areas.
In other words
, to cater to the growing demand of
population infrastructure and
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population and infrastructure
 facilities like education, recreation, and housing improves
leading
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lead
 to their
development
.
For example
, after a big conglomerate, in India, TATA set up their steel plant in a village the town developed at
higher pace
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a higher pace
 than adjacent regional areas. Those opposed to
this
 say that it increases the cost of
production
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products
 or services for the company.
However
,
Government
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the Government
 of the country, in order to promote
development
 of
such
 regions provide a lot of rebates on land, electricity, and give tax exemptions.
For example
, A city in the South Asian region to promote its special economic zone had provided acres of land at half price to the upcoming business segments. On balance, the fact that movement of companies to outskirts bring better employment opportunities for natives and promote equal distribution of
population
 outweighs the flawed argument that
such
 change increases operational cost for the industries.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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