Government investment in the arts ,such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. government must invest this money in public service instead. Do you agree or disagree.

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Government
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are spending
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is spending
lots of
money
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on the arts
,
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,
such
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as singing and
cinema but
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cinema, but
it is a waste of
money
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.
Government
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have
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has
to spend
money
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on public
facility
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in order to rectify public
facility
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rather
there
of them or themselves
their
arts.
To begin
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firstly
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,
Although
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the
government
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are spending
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is spending
money
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on public
facility
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.
people
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People
are facing many problems.
if
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If
government
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spend
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spends
money
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on public service
instead
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of
arts
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the arts
.
people
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People
can use public facilities easily.
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as Road, Infrastructure, public transportation.
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this
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are
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is
biggest problems which are faced by
local people
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the local people Government
Government
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have to include more buses so people can use public transport.
traffic
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Traffic
problems are solved.
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secondly
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Secondly
, not only traffic
problem but
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problem, but
also
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,
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,
health related problems are faced by citizen.
people
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People
pay
tax
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taxes
to
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government
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the government
in order to get best
facility
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from
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government
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the government
.
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government
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Government
are
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is
responsible to Solve health related problems
.
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.
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government
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Government
have
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has
to spend
money
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in
government
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hospital as well as
government
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have to provide latest medical equipment.
This
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two things are most important for citizens rather than arts which are providing
entertainment
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to people.
On the other hand
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,
firstly
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, arts which are
most important source
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the most important source
not only for
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entertainment but
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entertainment, but
also
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for gaining some knowledge for people. If
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government
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the government
do not spend
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does not spend
money
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on
arts
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the arts
.
people
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People
, who are fond of the Arts, cannot get
good
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better
facility
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in arts so people
will lost
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will lose
their interest in the arts field and
then
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they choose another way for
entertainment
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and gaining some knowledge.
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however
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However
, it is difficult to get a profit for a many people who are doing
job
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a job
the job
in industry and doing as
business
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a business
because without
government
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financial help, people do not get success in their business.
it
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It
is very important not only
at
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in
industry but
also
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country's economy because most of the country's economy
depend
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depends
on arts. To conclude, both things are important for local people so
government
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spend
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spends
money
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on both things because without Arts people cannot get
entertainment
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.
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