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Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education. To what extend do you agree?

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Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for fitness care and
education
 because it will reduce the countries
health
 issues and increase the literature and employment of the poor countries. Now a
days
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day
 most of the countries are facing with
health
 issues due to
nonhygenic
 food and environmental pollution and many more things
,
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,
 few countries they do not have enough budget to make good hospitals for their citizens because of their
economy
 and they do not have a resource to make a money and death is increasing due to non availability of hospitals and the peoples are poor they cannot afford the hospitals because financial issues.
there
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There
 are
lot
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lots
 of rich
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
 in the world they have
good
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a good economy
economy
,
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,
doctors
,
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,
health
 care
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 these countries can help the poor countries to
resduce
cut down on; make a reduction in
reduce
 the
health
 issues that does not make any difference to their
economy
 and they can save the peoples around the world who are facing the
health
 issues.
in
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In
 another way
education
 is most important tool for everyone to become success in life and lot of countries do not have good universities and schools the rich countries should build good universities and schools in poor countries that will help the people to become
succesful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
 and independent in their life and the countries literature will get increase and people will be more professional and kind to the society the global crimes will be less due to employment and the
education
 will help the people to achieve their dreams and goals.
the
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The
 people will get innovative ideas to develop their
countries
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country's
economy
, it
help
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helps
 them to educate their future generation
also
 the rich countries can make a life of poor country
peoples providing
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peoples, providing
good
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a good education
education
 that will increase the
golbal
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
global
 reputation of the rich countries.
in
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In
conclusion i
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conclusion, I
conclusion I
 agree that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for
health
 care and
education
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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