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Many believe that an effective public transport system is a key component of modern city. What are the advantages and disadvantages of public transport?

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It is believed that in urban areas that public transportation system could be crucial prosperity of those cities.
However
, apart from the priced-off service or
safety but
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safety, but
 there are some discomforts as well. It is true that public transit does not require from people to pay much money. More and more individuals in big cities can get
benefits
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the benefits
 of arriving one place to another by spending less and it obviously helps
for
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in
 saving up.
Moreover
, the community
transport
 could
also
 give more advantages to reach destinations safely. A majority of city dwellers are now using services owing to its security condition over some irresponsible taxi drivers. In Warsaw, Poland, most inhabitants of the city are being induced to intervene using the underground,
therefore
 the city government could have reached
utmost level
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the utmost level
 of decreasing pollution along with mass car accidents
noticably
in a noticeable manner
noticeably
.
Nonetheless
, the above opportunities the community
transport
 may sometimes be uncomfortable.
That is
 to say, most of the
elderies
a person who is older than you are
elders
 of
community
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the community
 could find it unfavourable due to the crowded vehicles which cause them to take a taxi
instead
.
Furthermore
, together with
inconveniency
an inconvenient discomfort
inconvenience
, it has an indecent factor
that is
slowliness
a ludicrous folly
silliness
lowliness
. Those uncomfortable cars can cause to spend
long time
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a long time
 in
transport
 and it
also negatively affect
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also negatively affects
 to lose time by missing bout crucial events. After the policy of increasing the tax payments for private cars in China, a tremendous number of people are in need waiting in the queues of stations regularly. In conclusion, albeit the some positive sides of public
transport
 in terms of reasonable price and safety, it still
make
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makes
 some inconveniences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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