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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows changes in the birth and
death
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 rates in New Zealand since 1901, and forecasts trends tip until 2101. Between 1901 and the present day, the birth
rate
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 has been consistently higher than the
death
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rate
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. It stood at 20,000 at the start of
this
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 period and increased to a peak of 66,000 in 1961. Since
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 the
rate
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 has fluctuated between 65 and 50 thousand and it is expected to decline slowly to around 45,000 births by the end of the century.
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, the
death
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rate
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 started below 10,000 and has increased steadily until the present time.
This
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 increase is expected to be more rapid between 2021 and 2051 when the
rate
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 will probably level off at around 60,000, before dropping slightly in 2101.
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, these opposing trends mean that the
death
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rate
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 will probably overtake the birth
rate
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 in around 2041 and the large gap between the two levels will be reversed in the later part of
this
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 century

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Vocabulary: Replace the words death, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • population growth
  • natural increase
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
  • high
  • low
  • steady
  • change
  • period
  • time
  • early
  • late
  • peak
  • gap
  • forecast
  • aging
  • immigration
  • baby boom
  • life span
  • health care
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