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Some people say that it is people have responsibility to protect environment while other say it is government it is primary role discuss both the view and give your opinion

#people #responsibility #environment #government #role
Protection of
e
nvironment
Suggestion
the environment
is a serious problem n
eed
Suggestion
needing
solving by spreading awareness to people through social media and a
dvertisement
Suggestion
advertising
in t
elevision
Accept comma addition
television, in
in a
ddition to supporting of
Suggestion
addition to supporting
government by following law and regulation. People must carry out rules and warning which he or she sees in television to decrease pollution and rescue
environment
. They have to throw the garbage in rubbish bin not allowed in the public street and stop smoking which harm
environment
 and people. Government prevent building f
actories near
Accept comma addition
factories, near
from a
griculture
Suggestion
agricultural
land and places which individual people live in it. He or she o
bligate
Suggestion
obligates
to punish any person try to harm
e
nvironment
Accept comma addition
environment, for
for e
xample leaving
Accept comma addition
example, leaving
dead animals in the street without b
uried
Suggestion
burying
them. In my o
pinion
Accept comma addition
opinion, this
this
 responsibility of two together not one or prioritizing one above o
ther.
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 People must carry out all instruction and warning on social media and government must protect them by banning building new factories to invest money without i
nteresting
Suggestion
interest
of p
eople
Suggestion
peoples'
person's
peoples
health
.i
Accept space
.
n
Suggestion
In
conclusion protection of
environment
 don’t establish without presence people and government.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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