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Band 2

Some people say that it is people have responsibility to protect environment while other say it is government it is primary role discuss both the view and give your opinion

#people #responsibility #environment #government #role
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Protection of the environment is a serious problem needing solving by spreading awareness to people through social media and advertising in television
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in addition
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 to supporting of government by following law and regulation. People must carry out rules and warning which he or she sees in television to decrease pollution and rescue environment. They have to throw the garbage in rubbish bin not allowed in the public street and stop smoking which harm lung
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finally lead
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finally leads
 to cancer
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 Government prevent building factories, near from
agriculture
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agricultural
 land and places which individual people live in it. He or she obligates to punish any person try to harm climate,
for example
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, leaving dead animals in the street without burying them. In my opinion,
this
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 responsibility of two together not one or prioritizing one above
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
. People must carry out all instruction and warning on social media and government must protect them by banning building new factories to invest money without interest
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in
people
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peoples'
person's
peoples
 health
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 In conclusion protection of environment don’t establish without presence people and government.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Individual responsibility
  • Community involvement
  • Personal accountability
  • Governmental intervention
  • Environmental protection
  • Recycling
  • Public transport
  • Conserving resources
  • Spreading awareness
  • CO2 emissions restrictions
  • Waste management protocols
  • Renewable energy
  • Enact and enforce regulations
  • Incentivize individual action
  • Frameworks
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