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Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people. Why do you think is that? Do you think they should be encouraged to do some useful activities in their free time?

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Now a days
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Nowadays
, most of the young stars are spending
there
of them or themselves
their
 free
time
 in shopping. It's a new era in current society. There are multiple factors involved in
this
 1)
outlets
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Outlet
Outlets
 malls:
this
 play a key role in current generation because it has all stores at one place and food court is the main attraction of outlet malls. So people think they can finish all
thing
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things
 in one
place but
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place, but
 in my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is a
market
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marketing
 trick which attract younger people to spend
there
of them or themselves
their
time
 with loved one. 2)
online
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Online
 promotions/coupons: now a days most of the younger people
spends
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spend
 a lot of
time
 in social
media which
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media, which
 is another platform for stores to promote
there
of them or themselves
their
 products by having Promotions and links to
there
of them or themselves
their
 stores in social media. In my opinion, young stars
needs
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need
 to have
time
 limitation when they
shopping
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are shopping
 and they need to spend there Valuable
time
 in other activities which helps their career. Since because at that stage they have more
time
 to focus on their since they don't have any strings attached that stage.

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