Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people. Why do you think is that? Do you think they should be encouraged to do some useful activities in their free time?

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Now a days
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Nowadays
, most of the young stars are spending
there
of them or themselves
their
free
time
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in shopping. It's a new era in current society. There are multiple factors involved in
this
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1)
outlets
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Outlet
Outlets
malls:
this
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play a key role in current generation because it has all stores at one place and food court is the main attraction of outlet malls. So people think they can finish all
thing
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things
in one
place but
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place, but
in my
opinion it
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opinion, it
is a
market
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marketing
trick which attract younger people to spend
there
of them or themselves
their
time
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with loved one. 2)
online
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Online
promotions/coupons: now a days most of the younger people
spends
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spend
a lot of
time
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in social
media which
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media, which
is another platform for stores to promote
there
of them or themselves
their
products by having Promotions and links to
there
of them or themselves
their
stores in social media. In my opinion, young stars
needs
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need
to have
time
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limitation when they
shopping
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are shopping
and they need to spend there Valuable
time
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in other activities which helps their career. Since because at that stage they have more
time
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to focus on their since they don't have any strings attached that stage.

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