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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Write at least 150 words.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Write at least 150 words.
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This
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 table depicts the consuming
ratioes
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ratios
rations
 for various types in many countries in 2002. According
what
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 is shown ,
that
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the countries were most consuming
in
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of
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 food,drink and
smooking
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smoking
 and the least consuming in
learning
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field
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. We note that in food,drink and
smooking
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smoking
cooking
the
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Turkey was
was
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took the first place
between
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among
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 the five countries in
this
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field
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,
while
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 Sweden in the
last
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 place. In the fashion
field
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 especially wearing
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shoeses
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shoes
 the people in Italy were most
utilizing
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for
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clothing and shoes ,
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 the people in Sweden the least one. In the
knowledgement
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acknowledgement
 and leisure
field
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,Turkey was the most consuming in
this
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field
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 ,
while
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 Spain
charactirestic
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characteristic
characteristics
 the poor
consuming
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consumption
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 in
learning
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the learning
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 and leisure
field
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.
To sum up
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,we could say that, in 2002 the interest of people
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the
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learning and leisure was very poor.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words field with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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