The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1983 and 2003.

The graph shows the rates of participation in three different

activities in a UK sports

club between 1983 and 2003.
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This
graph shows changes in the popularity of three different
activities
in a UK
sports
club over a period of 20 years. In 1983 around 50% of club members participated in swimming, so
this
was clearly the most popular activity.
However
,
this
figure dipped steadily to 15% in 1998 and levelled off at
this
rate until 2003.
In contrast
, 32% of members did team
sports
in 1983, and
this
rate reached a peak of 40% in 1998 before dropping to its former level.
Participation
rates for team
sports
increased
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for swimming and became the highest for all
activities
from 1993 to 2003.
Finally
,
participation
in gym
activities
finished at only 5% in 1983, but
this
figure grew rapidly from 1988 to 1998, eventually reaching a peak of around 25%, making
gym
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the
second
most popular activity.
Overall
,
participation
in swimming fluctuated considerably during the period. Team
sports
,
however
, remained popular,
while
participation
in gym
activities
declined significantly over the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, sports, participation with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • participation rates
  • significant increases/decreases
  • pattern
  • stability
  • growth
  • decline
  • membership
  • comparison
  • socio-economic events
  • historical context
  • period of analysis
  • peak
  • popularity
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