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Some children start school at 7 while others start school at 4. Does starting school at a young age have more advantages than disadvantages?

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In recent years, some of the parents prefer to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 to
school
 their children at early ages like at 4, while some children start
school
 at 7. There are some advantages and disadvantages that children who start
school
 at an early stage. I feel that negative effects are greater.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the arguments. On the one hand, it is true that a positive impact on children who start their education at an early stage. The
first
 reason that an early
age education
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age, education
 will provide to increase their
intelligence
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intelligence, such
such
 as writing, reading skills.
In addition
, those skills will help to expand their interests and it might connect to their future careers. The
second
 reason is that children learn about social
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and communication skills in society. They
lean
gain knowledge or skills
learn
 to be punctual to attend
school
 every day,
also
, communication with their teachers and other students will influence their individual development of communication skills.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages for children who attend
school
 at an early age.
Firstly
, children will
less spend time with
Suggestion
spend less time with
 their parents and siblings,
for example
, some children might need to build a relationship with their parents and siblings
such
 as express their emotional feelings in order to build their individual developments.
Secondly
, their teacher might have to do
extra support
Suggestion
the extra support
 with children’s physical training
such
 as pee if they are not able to do themselves. In conclusion, while it is true that there are some merits over children’s education in the
school
 at an early age, in my opinion, the disadvantages outweighs the advantages when it
considering
Suggestion
considers
is considering
. The parents should carefully consider suitable ages of their children before enrolling in the
school
.

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