A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding your recent and amazing social responsibility campaign in the downtown district, as it has grabbed my attention. Relevantly, I believe that it is part of my responsibility as a citizen to participate in your survey and highlight why there are benefits for each of the options that you have mentioned in your advertisement.

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group work is a strong statement for the youth, as it allows them to recognize the positive outcome of cooperation.

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there are many benefits of supporting local

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is a crucial cultural element that influences and shapes our thinking, mood, and our approach towards life. As well,

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has been part of what makes us more capable to endure our daily routine.

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, I truly believe that supporting outdoor musicals

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your CSR campaign. Thank you. Yours Sincerely, Mohamed Hawas

Mon Feb 10 2020

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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189 words

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