You are a student at a university in Brighton and are living in private accommodation and have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to you in

regards

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to the ongoing problems with the hot

water

service in the apartment at 7/26 Willisden Rd., Brighton. As you are aware the hot

water

service has not been working since the 17th of December when I called to notify you of the

problem

. I appreciate that within a day you arranged for tradesmen to come to the flat to resolve the

problem

However

, after the workmen arrived without the appropriate tools for the job and after spending 10 minutes looking at the job advised that they were aware of the cause of the

problem

and would return later in the day to fix it. They did not return until the 22nd of December when they advised that the

problem

was different to what they first expected and would need to order

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new parts. On their return just after Christmas they replaced the thermostat and declared that the

problem

was fixed, but we still have no hot

water

. I would appreciate it if you could

either

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arrange

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workmen to come and either fix or replace the hot

water

service before the 31st of December as we have guests coming to stay over New Year and would not wish them to fall ill. I look forward to your rapid response, Kind regards, Simon Smith

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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1Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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You are a student at a university in Brighton and are living in private accommodation and have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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