Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason to doing this? is this a negative or positive development?

Success is the goal of almost every individual, and as humans we have the mindset to thrive daily and to be successful in all our
endeavors
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavours
. It could either be studying hard to pass an examination or either competing hard to be the COO of a Fortune 500 company or just trying to be the best mum to your children. As humans, we tend to be competitive in
nature especially
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nature, especially
due to the rising exposure to social media and television.
Therefore
, the need to achieve greatness is the goal of almost every living human on earth. The rising need for parents to place great pressures on their children can be due to various factors. I have a work colleague who is a medical doctor and who insists that all three of his kids study medicine at doctorate level.
This
is not unusual, as most parents, especially the successful ones have
this
undying belief that they are in the best position to choose the careers of their offsprings. I believe competition, ego, the need to survive and the love the parents have for their kids are some of the major reasons for the pressure being placed by parents to their children. It is a negative development because a child should be given the opportunity to pick a career path and should be given the emotional support to be able to thrive well in that career. A musician in my country has 2 children, he wanted them to be musicals like him and enrolled them in prestigious music
schools but
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schools, but
they ended up choosing their career paths and they are both renowned and successful lawyers today. As a parent, my advice is "DO NOT FORCE YOUR CHILDREN". In conclusion, parents should
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
to avoid being overly competitive in nature and allow the children
grow
Suggestion
to grow
in their own paces. Competition is one of the reasons for the pressure being placed on children by their parents. In most cases the children end up hating their parents and being successful on their own. Schools/teachers should set up
meeting
Suggestion
a meeting
meetings
with
parents
Suggestion
the parents
of their students to discuss the areas where their wards are thriving at in school in order to help them achieve greatness in
future
Suggestion
the future
.
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  • Excessive pressure
  • Academic achievements
  • Professional success
  • Secure future
  • Social comparison
  • Competitive environment
  • Psychological impact
  • Stress and anxiety
  • Resilience
  • Work ethic
  • Emotional well-being
  • Supportive parenting
  • Achievements
  • Life skills
  • Balance
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