it is better for live away from the home during their University studies rather than staying with their parents. to what extent you agree or disagree

in
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In
the current
scenerio
an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)
scenario
, migrating
to faroff place
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to a far off place
to far off place
to pursue their higher education has become a common trend. On
one
's point of view it's a positive trend
,
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,
while others refute it. I definitely believe that
,
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,
that moving away from
home
has a positive impact on an individual's personality. To commence with
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there are several
reason
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reasons
to
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To
bolster my opinion.
firstly
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Firstly
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,
there are innumerable case of wherein people from rural village with simple personality have been
molded
shaped to fit by or as if by altering the contours of a pliable mass (as by work or effort)
moulded
into dynamic thinkers and
problem
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Problem
solvers when migrated to developing countries.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
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,
there are many famous personalities who
had transform
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had transformed
themselves by staying far away from
home
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,
on their own.
this
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This
genuine prove us that how student's living away from
home
can or has to transform themselves by facing various challenges.
each
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Each
on of us at
one
point of time or the other has to face these difficulties so it is better to face these situations when you are young and energetic.
for
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example a
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example, a
survey conducted
on
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at
by
a University in my city reveals that students who developed
holistically where
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holistically, where
holistically were
holistically were were
the ones who lived on the campus.
on
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On
other hand
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the other hand
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,
the students who live away from
home
has their own disadvantages.
one
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One
of the major issue is
home
sick and loneliness which may lead to poor performance in their studies.
likewise
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Likewise
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,
some students may require parents supervision just to stop them from indulging in any wrong activities. In conclusion
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,
the
important
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importance
of family cannot be imbued
.
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.
But still, it is necessary for students to stay
from
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with
their parents
.
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.
students
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Students
who live with their parents are like frogs in a well at
one
point of time they may need to get out well to learn more about life
.
Accept space
.

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