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some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets other people prefer to do their shopping online .Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #shop #food #supermarkets
Nowadays online
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Nowadays, online
 shopping has become a new trend among the customers.While many people are attracted to online shopping
,
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,
there are still many who
wold
past tense of "will"
would
 prefer the traditional way of buying goods.Buying groceries in supermarkets allows us to pick us the fresh
,
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,
green and the best quality product.
This
 essay will discuss both viewpoints and state why the traditional shopping is much more superior to new modern online shopping. Traditional shopping offer best customer experience and it is preferred by many
.
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.
In fact the shoppers may find it joyous to walk around from sections to sections observing and choosing food that are fresh and good conditions.There is an
oppertunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
 to physically see and touch and ensure that are not compromising the product.
For instance
, Bhatbhateni and
salesberry
the capital and largest city of Zimbabwe
Salisbury
 are the most preferred supermarkets where freshly stored groceries are available.
However we
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However, we
 cannot deny the fact that online food shopping is a convenient way that helps us to save time due to our busy work schedule.People can simply add items in their carts and pay with debit/credit or even cash on delivery.
Inspite
Suggestion
In spite
 of
this
 we will have to make compromises on the quality and
freshnwss
the property of being pure and fresh (as if newly made); not stale or deteriorated
freshness
 of the goods.We might have to face the situation of
sp
to a very great extent or degree
so
soap
soup
 called expectations verses reality.We cannot compromise our money and risk our health on buying the
prodcuts
commodities offered for sale
products
predicates
 which no longer live on to our expectations. In conclusion visiting the supermarket and buying goods by ourselves and not by online not only gives us
oppertunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
 to buy the best
ones but
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ones, but
also
 helps us ensure that those were worth our money.

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