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People are less fit and active nowadays than in the past, what are the reasons for this? What do you think can be done for it?

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Keeping up with the fast pace of lifestyle could mean people are spending less
time
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 at the gym and more
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 at home. Nowadays, people are spending most of their
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 at home resting or just chilling after work.
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 seems to be the trend
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 work gets a lot of their
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 and energy so they go to the gym less and less often. They'd rather have a peaceful night in the comforts of their bedroom than go outside and jog or have physical activities. Physical activities would mean they'd have to spend more energy even after work
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 they just skip it. But there are other activities if going to the gym is taking your
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 and energy. They could just walk for at least 30 minutes of just take the stairs rather than taking the elevators. Walking your dogs could
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 be an alternative if they want to be fit and healthy.
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, avoid eating too much carbohydrates and sweets if the main goal is to have a healthy lifestyle that warrants no physical activity.

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