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Too much money is wasted on repairing old buildings that should be used to knock them down and build new ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #buildings #ones
When mankind was evolved, they found the necessity of shelter. It started from leaving in den till the sky crapper we see in
modern world
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the modern world
. People build the
shelter according
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shelter, according
 to the climate, location and own protection. There is still old building can be seen in most of the countries which are treated as symbol of architecture used in old time and culture. To give an example, countries which have snow fall have a hut shaped structure without terrace. They are made of wood and lot many
human
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humanitarian
 efforts are put to build them.
Government
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The government
 spent
lot money
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a lot money
 to keep repairing them, as there is an emotional attachment local, and it glorifies the culture.
Also
, it helps in attracting tourists. On the contradictory part, we see the new building with all amenities. Have automated doors, smart lights, high-tech securities, voice recognition systems etc. These have become
symbol
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a symbol
symbols
 of status and part of lifestyle. Better utilisation of space, planned ventilation and lift to on any floor. People
tends
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tend
 to live in
such
 building which ease their life. Governments should spend money on those old
building
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buildings
 which are becoming
tourist attraction
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a tourist attraction
 and, have historical importance. But spending on all old
building
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buildings
 is not a good idea as, population is increasing, and we must change with time. Modern building with new technology can give look and feel of old architecture with modern necessity. Where ever possible government should invest in
construction
Suggestion
the construction
 of new buildings.

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