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Many people feel that students should learn from online materials while others feel that it is better to use printed materials. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, some teachers encourage their students to use online study materials in their
education
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educational
 process. It is reasonable, because help
decrease
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decreases
 number of books and notebooks which pupils bring to school daily. Other teachers,
however
, prefer printed materials in consideration of the fact, that they help students better remember the data, they learn. In my opinion, online materials quite better fit nowadays neediness.
First
 of all, talking about paper-based materials it should be
mentioned their
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mentioned, their
 high helpful in
hand-writing
something written by hand
handwriting
handwritten
hand-written
 memory. In a process of writing, person can better remember data
he
male possessive pronoun
his
 studies. The visual memory
also
 works better, while pupil looks at the piece of paper, which have defects and unique texture,
instead
 of
monitor
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the monitor
a monitor
monitors
, where all papers will be the same.
Finally
, in a case of the internet connection problems, or just a computer breakage student
would not has
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would not have
 a possibility to make a homework or classwork properly. At the same time, it should be taken into the consideration total amount of students. Using online materials
instead
 of printed one can save millions of trees.
Moreover
, air, water, and earth pollution can be decreased in a case of rejecting of usage paper-making manufactories. As we talk about student,
benefits
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the benefits
 of them are obvious – they do not need
handle
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to handle
 a lot of books on the way to the school/college. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
 want to underline that both approaches of teaching -with or without printed materials have their advantages. But in my mind, using online materials is environmentally friendly and can help students be healthier.

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