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These days, a lot of people have their own computers and mobile. It has become quite easy do job from home. Do you think, it has more advantages and disadvantages to do work from home? I

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With the increasing rise of smart phones and tablets, people nowadays have more access to the internet,
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 making it easy to have work from
home
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 duties. Work from
home
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 is a great
opportunity particularly
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opportunity, particularly
 for those who have families. With
this
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 option, they can do their jobs while taking care of their household especially their children. Parents can now multitask and do house chores whilst doing work.
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, along with the multitasking, working from
home
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 can save them money and less clothes to wash. Being in a family, having
this
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 option would be beneficial and would create a more work-life balance. With all these pros, there are
also
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 some cons in doing the job at
home
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. Some people, especially the young ones, tend to be lazy and start the day late,
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 delaying their works. There is
also
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 the distraction of watching the
television making
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television, making
 it hard to focus on the job at hand. In my opinion, working from
home
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 has more advantages than disadvantage. Not only can people have more time to spend with their family, their time would be used better and
more efficient
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more efficiently
.

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