Some people believe that reading stories from e book better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that it is important for children to read electronic books
instead
of watching
tv
or playing computer games.
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refers to the speaker or writer
I
completely agree
that is
better for kids to learn through stories for different reasons
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Firstly
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it has been said that reading stories increase the
inteligence
the ability to comprehend; to understand and profit from experience
intelligence
for
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in
children
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However
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,
watching
tv
might
decreases
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decrease
concentration and
also
gives
childreen
a young person of either sex
children
the feeling of stress
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Secondly
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childreen
a young person of either sex
children
who often learn plenty of stories may have a sense of imagination and innovation as well
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for
exemple if
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example, if
example if
we verify the past of an inventor we are pretty sure that we will find that when he was
young he
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young, he
has been learning stories often and because he did so
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his brain pushes him to think about creating something new.
As a
result he
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result, he
became an inventor
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Another point to consider is that
childreen
a young person of either sex
children
can watch
tv
and play games sometimes
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because
american
of or relating to the United States of America or its people or language or culture
American
scientists emphasize that kids should sometimes watch science fiction movies and cartoon on
tv
regurarly
in a regular manner
regularly
unless the content is violent
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Moreover
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playing computer games can
helps
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help
children release from
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release children from
the stress of studies and homeworks which it has been given by teachers in school
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Finaly
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Finally
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,
even
tough
(postpositive) however
though
children prefer spending time on
tv
and games
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,
it
it is
it's
better for them to read short or long stories
regurarly
in a regular manner
regularly
which will help them of course in their future
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