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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your

Some individual believes social media has connected people in closeness while others perceives
otherwise
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.
This
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 essay will elaborate more on both sides with
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 examples and my opinion will be made known. Technological advancement has made life easier and more enjoyable in the sense that one doesn't need to travel
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 far or near places before they can meet with their
love
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loved
 ones, no worries about transport fare in order to see your families all you have to do is just load your mobile phone with credit and you are good to call whoever you wish to contact.
In
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addition the risks
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addition to the risks
 involved when visiting relatives in other towns is being reduced and the stress associated with it. One only needs to login to
facebook
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Facebook
 and you may find old friends and mates who have lost contact with.Example from a personal experience, an uncle of mine was paying a visit on a Christmas holiday but unfortunately had an accident and broke his leg.
On the other hand
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 technology has
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 own demerit the warmth and closeness one feels around each other might not be seen during
call making
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the call making
 or video conference. The hugs and kisses may not be felt since they are far from each other as
compare
Suggestion
compared
comparatively
 to physical touching and contact. The emotional aspect of seeing a friend or a relation in need will be overlooked since the empathy won't be there.
For
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instance when
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instance, when
a
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an
 expectant mother puts to bed and the husband is not around
,
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,
the father will miss the
first
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 moment bonding with the baby and that time can never be
retrieve
Suggestion
retrieved
 no matter what. To recapitulate
,
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,
I strongly agree that advanced telecommunications has linked people more closer than the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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