As there is increasing unemployment in the world, while at the same time those who have jobs are working harder and harder, it would be better to have a four-day working week for everyone, and so to create more jobs. In what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is an outbreak of unemployment rates in the recent year.

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find a

solution it

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solution, it

is commonly suggested that implementing a four-day working week per person would dramatically reduce unemployment rates by creating enough work for everyone. I completely disagree with

this

point of view, as I believe splitting

expresses position, direction or location, or point in time

work can cause less progress, while

also

leaving many individuals below

poverty line

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the poverty line

First

of all, individuals are responsible in performing their operations.

when

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When

a single operation is divided among

sevral

(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many

several

employees, it becomes

complicate which

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complicated, which

complicated which

results in less progress

acheived

to gain with effort

achieved

in maximum time.

For instance

, when a sole employee is responsible in creating an app which usually takes

atleast

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at least

a month to finish it, in

this

case when a single operation is divided it results in confusion on where to start and often breaches the deadline for the project to finish.

Furthermore

, employees working under a four-week program can be affected from financial status as well. When an employee's work is distributed it

also

means his salary is

also

being

splitted

separate into parts or portions

split

, which leaves him in poor financial aid.

For instance

, when a worker is earning enough to satisfy his hunger, with the new working restrictions salary would be half of his previous earning and has to compromise in various lifestyles in order to

finacially

from a financial point of view

financially

support himself or his family. In conclusion,

distrubuting

(statistics) an arrangement of values of a variable showing their observed or theoretical frequency of occurrence

distribution

distributing

jobs equally among people can cause less progress and

also

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the main organ of photosynthesis and transpiration in higher plants

leaves

loves

lives

indivuidual

a human being

individual

compramising

making or willing to make concessions

compromising

their lifestyle.

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Fully explain your ideas

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