Some people think that governments should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployed and homeless do you agree /disagree.

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In
this
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contemporary era, rising count of jobless and people without
roof
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a roof
roofs
is worrisome,
hence
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section of society
consider
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considers
that governing
authorities
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authority
should look after them. Personally, I am not in favour of
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notion owing to various reasons which will be
explore
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explored
in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly
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, it has been observed that because of rising inflation and international trade wars economical condition of many nations is affected and facing huge challenges to overcome these major issues. If ruling parties, decided to take care of
masses
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the masses
due to lack of employment, will be an added burden on the public funds.
Majority
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The majority
of the authorities, trying hard to educate people and curb poverty to make them independent. If authorities diverted their focus on the above issue,
then
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unfortunately funds
needs
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need
to be diverted and
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education programme will be on hold.
Campaign
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A campaign
to literate every individual is a long-term solution and it will help to create independent persons, entrepreneurs and the same people will help
economy
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the economy
to grow.
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, If unemployed people and needy people get easy money or accommodation freely that will make them lazy and dependent forever. Recently as per the report released by the United Nations, the Canadian government tried to help needy people by providing basic pay to jobless and apartments for the needy ones, but that service was exploited by many residents and sadly they have to stop
this
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service. With the help of
above example
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the above example
, it is clear that
masses
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the masses
will be aimless if all the things provided freely without any efforts. In closing, government should focus on basic needs of residents and work on
long term solution
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a long term solution
and conduct campaigns to motivate these kinds of people.

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