Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages.If they are not taught, many are at risk of dying out.

It is argued that a penalty should be applied to parents of over wait children.
This
essay disagrees with
this
statement because (they are not the only responsible ones and
this
will not solve the problem) One other point is that not only amount of food person eats affects his weight
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but
also
the genetics have
impact
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an impact
on it. One of the most recent reaches found that genetic factors are responsible for 40% of the obesity cases.Which means that
however
for
example we
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example, we
might find parents who are so keen on their children and always provide them with healthy food and the children suffering
over weight
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
as a result
of genetic factors. Destitute countries which are suffering from catastrophic events must be helped by rich countries.
This
essay agree with
this
statement because it’s a moral obligation to
this
nations
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nation
and
this
may save thousands of people. When any country has a
catastrophe it
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catastrophe, it
is a very confusing and stressful to any government to deal with
such
situation
,
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what if the country already has an economic problem!.
Thats
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why when one of these indigent nations has a disaster rich countries have to contribute in managing
this
situation financially. Number of survivals can be redoubled because of money of prosperous nations
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.
It can be spent on logistics services
such
as helicopters transporting victims to
safe place
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a safe place
or food given to starving people or it may be education services offered to poor children
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In conclusi
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n,one can say that rush countries have to take her share of responsibility for saving spirits of innocent people of needy countries having natural disasters
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  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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