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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Correct article usage
The U.S
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U.S
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U.S.
 has made a consumption
about
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of
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 energy by fuel since 1980 with projections up to 2030. As you can see in the figure, there are six kinds of fuel.
Firstly
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, petrol and oil
has
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have
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 the highest quadrillion
units
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 among the rest.
Although
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 from 1980 to 1995, the graph shows a fluctuating line,
but
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it is dramatically increasing up to 2030.
Secondly
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, coal has the
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second highest
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second-highest
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 projection
as of
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from
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 2020 to 2030. It
also
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 shows a little fluctuation in the previous years.
Moreover
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, natural gas is the
third
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 one that has the highest projection.
However
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, from 2014 to 2030, the level of quadrillion
units
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 remains constant.
On the other hand
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, nuclear is the fourth one,
then
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 solar or wind
,
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 and the
last
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 rank is
the
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Hydropower. These three fuels start at the same number of
units
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in
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from
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 1980 to 1986. There are not much
different
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differences
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of
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in
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 quadrillion
units
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 between these three.
Therefore
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, I conclude that most people in the
U.S
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U.S.
 are using petrol and oil.
Apart from
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this
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, there are
also
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 people using coal and natural gases.
Furthermore
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, nuclear, solar or wind
,
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 and Hydropower
is
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are
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 seldom used and
most
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are most
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 likely built for
company
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a company
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 only.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable resources
  • sustainable
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • biofuels
  • hydroelectric power
  • solar energy
  • wind energy
  • trends
  • increases/decreases
  • shifts
  • milestones
  • significant
  • forecast
  • implications
  • sustainable development
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