The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Correct article usage
The U.S
U.S
has made a consumption Correct your spelling
U.S.
about
energy by fuel since 1980 with projections up to 2030. As you can see in the figure, there are six kinds of fuel.
Change preposition
of
Firstly
, petrol and oil has
the highest quadrillion Change the verb form
have
units
among the rest. Although
from 1980 to 1995, the graph shows a fluctuating line, but
it is dramatically increasing up to 2030. Remove the conjunction
apply
Secondly
, coal has the second highest
projection Add a hyphen
second-highest
as of
2020 to 2030. It Change preposition
from
also
shows a little fluctuation in the previous years. Moreover
, natural gas is the third
one that has the highest projection. However
, from 2014 to 2030, the level of quadrillion units
remains constant.
On the other hand
, nuclear is the fourth one, then
solar or wind,
and the Remove the comma
apply
last
rank is the
Hydropower. These three fuels start at the same number of Correct article usage
apply
units
in
1980 to 1986. There are not much Change preposition
from
different
Replace the word
differences
of
quadrillion Change preposition
in
units
between these three.
Therefore
, I conclude that most people in the U.S
are using petrol and oil. Correct your spelling
U.S.
Apart from
this
, there are also
people using coal and natural gases. Furthermore
, nuclear, solar or wind,
and Hydropower Remove the comma
apply
is
seldom used and Correct subject-verb agreement
are
most
likely built for Add a missing verb
are most
company
only.Add an article
a company
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