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Nowadays people are spending more time in workplace and staying away from home for work. Discuss its advantages and disadvantages with your own experiences.

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Nowadays changes
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Nowadays, changes
 have been observed in the behaviour of people. They have started spending more time in
workplace
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the workplace
 and less time at home. There could be certain advantages and disadvantages related to
such
 kind of behaviour. These days there has been so changes are being implemented within
company premises
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the company premises
. Various types of facilities are given to all the employees these days. Employees have full freedom to work as per their convenience. There are so many recreational activities happening in
workplace
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the work place
work place
 like gym and other sports activities. By engaging in these activities, they do get a break from their hectic schedule and boost their energy-level. Apart from these activities so many cafes and coffee shops are available within
office premises
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the office premises
. If somebody wants to have some snack, they can easily go to these cafes. There is no need for an employee to leave office premises. But if there are advantages,
then
 there are equally some disadvantages as well. A person
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