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Many parents move to other countries for work with their families. Do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

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In spite of the recent development of global society, a lot of families decide to move to overseas for their work. Many people think that there are disadvantages of moving other
country
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. I agree some extent with
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 view, while there may be some advantages with
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 opinion, it seems to me that it is more likely to have beneficial effects on the family.
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 with, it is true say to that moving overseas carries some demerits. The
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 problem is that communication
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 as a language barrier.
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, if their family are not able to speak
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the language
a language
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 in
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country
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a country
the country
countries
 where they move, they need to learn a lot of new things for living
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 as buying goods or asking for simple questions while they do not face those situations if they live in their own
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 to that, they might face the cultural differences that it may difficult to involve in local communities. Other hand, there are some advantages of moving new
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 for parents and their children should be considered.
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, the parents and children are able to live together.
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, they need to help each other in a daily life, which building their relationships tight through living in the overseas.
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, the family can learn new things which new language, culture, exploring new places. Those experiences will make expanding their interests and knowledge. In conclusion, while it is true that there are some concerns moving to
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 with
family
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the family
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, in my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages when considering. These experiences would enrich both parents and children in the long term.
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