Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, cloths and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individual who only think about their own wishes. other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some people think, giving freedom to kind for selecting daily needs
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as food, cloths and entertainment source makes them selfish. They don'
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think of the other. While other people's thinking by doing so we make them independent and its important aspect. In my opinion, we should give kids freedom to
choice
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their matters as its make them independent and strong, but are given
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freedom in some extend not totally. By allowing children to
choice
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their basic necessity makes them
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makers. They don'
t
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rely on another for their basic need. But all these things should be done is some limit. As a
kids
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kid
they don'
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understand bad or good about themselves. If we allow them total to take decisions without interference, they might take wrong decisions for themselves. As a kid they have less
experiance
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
in life. They don'
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know what food is good for them and what are bad. They don'
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know which entertainment source could take them to a right path or which to a wrong. They have less
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(computer science) a system of world-wide electronic communication in which a computer user can compose a message at one terminal that can be regenerated at the recipient's terminal when the recipient logs in
emails
power, so we should not allow them completely
to decised
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to decide
to decided
what to do
amd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
make them bring selfish attitude in them.
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, Parent's always suggest their
childern
a young person of either sex
children
to watch certain TV show to increase their knowledge.
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thing is not force but
care
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the care
of parent's towards their
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. But
its
it is
it's
not good
to always interfer
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always interfering
to always interfere
to always interfered
to always interferes
in
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with
your
child
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decision
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of
choice
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. Respect their
choice
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also
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and don'
t
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force them to do certain things. Don'
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make your
child
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depend on you totally, let them be independent. Let them
tak
carry out
take
talk
their won
decision
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, you only play a
supporter
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supporting
supportive
role of guiding your
child
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. Try to understand children mind
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.
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THis
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This
is
also
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important for making your
child
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strong. I
concude
decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion
conclude
concede
concluded
, my opinion about
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is neutral. I agree that
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child
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children
the child
a child
should become independent, they should allow to select their
choice
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of food, clothes
etcbut
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this
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should not
completly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
. As a
child
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they have low understanding level. They might spoil
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
by taking wrong
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by taking a wrong
decision
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or
followinng
about to be mentioned or specified
following
wrong attitude.

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