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People living in the 21st century are enjoying better quality of life compared to people who lived in the previous century. To what extent do you agree?

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In
this
 contemporary era, due to the advent of technology, life has become
more easier
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easier
 than compared to the past.
Thus
,
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,
in comparison to the previous centuries, folk of
21st
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the 21st century
century
are enjoying
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is enjoying
 a better lifestyle. To embark on, nowadays, people do not have to wait for weeks in order to meet their relatives who are far away from them, they can go wherever they want because of transportation. Apart from
this
, in the previous centuries, people faced
deaths even
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deaths, even
 from the disease which are considered normal in the 21st
century
. The things people of
this
century
 are
using
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using, such
such
 as, refrigerators, fan, air conditioner and so on were not available to the past populace. Moving
further
,
Although
, people of previous centuries used to
eat but
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eat, but
 at that time they do not have options to eat
variety
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a variety
 of different dishes like today because of which they can't enjoy different
cusines
the practice or manner of preparing food or the food so prepared
cuisines
.
Furthermore
, 21st
century
 people enjoy due to the availability of many games, entertainment shows and many more things which was not available
to
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for
 the past generations. To conclude, no one can deny the fact that people of
this
century
 are enjoying their life to the fullest in comparison to the previous centuries people.
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