The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration below on how
senior
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in the united states of America
was
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able to use their
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time
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the 1980’s
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1980
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to
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. The relevance of
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data is to provide a clearer understanding of how
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used their available time in maintaining their physiological, psychological,
social
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and social
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life balance, where
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whole
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being must be
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cared
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of. Watching TV during the early years is very common
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every individual just stays at home,
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while
eating popcorn rather than going outside and
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some money for the ride and theatre fee. Just
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good weather and a pair of shoes can help in maintaining good health for that individual who wanted to pursue hiking as part of their daily routine and exercise. As
the
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time goes by, hiking has been
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major activity
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the elderly that constantly increased until 2020.
On the other hand
, reading is one of the past times since Surfing the internet during
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the 1980’s
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1980
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is not that applicable, it is
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, and
individual
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engaged to use during
2000
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’s
where
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reading decreased by 20%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ’s with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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