The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration below on how
senior
Add an article
a senior’s
’s
in the united states of America was
able to use their Correct subject-verb agreement
were
vacant
time Replace the word
vacation
during
Change preposition
from
Correct article usage
the 1980’s
1980
Fix apostrophe usage
1980s
’s
to 2010
Change noun form
2010s
’s
.
The relevance of this
data is to provide a clearer understanding of how elderly
used their available time in maintaining their physiological, psychological, Correct article usage
the elderly
social
life balance, where Correct word choice
and social
in
Change preposition
on
whole
being must be Change the article
the whole
taking
Change the form of the verb
taken
cared
of.
Watching TV during the early years is very common Replace the word
care
where
every individual just stays at home, Correct word choice
when
relax
Wrong verb form
relaxing
while
eating popcorn rather than going outside and spend
some money for the ride and theatre fee.
Just Wrong verb form
spending
a
good weather and a pair of shoes can help in maintaining good health for that individual who wanted to pursue hiking as part of their daily routine and exercise. As Remove the article
apply
the
time goes by, hiking has been Correct article usage
apply
the
major activity Correct article usage
a
by
the elderly that constantly increased until 2020.
Change preposition
of
On the other hand
, reading is one of the past times since Surfing the internet during Correct article usage
the 1980’s
1980
Fix apostrophe usage
1980s
’s
is not that applicable, it is frequently
, and Change the word
frequent
individual
engaged to use during Change the adjective
individually
2000
Fix apostrophe usage
2000s
’s
where
reading decreased by 20%.Correct word choice
when
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