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Should education and health care be free of charge and funded by the government or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services?

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It is argued that whether study as well as medical care should be
chargeless
marked by lack of attention or consideration or forethought or thoroughness; not careful
careless
 or financed by the administration, and I totally agree, or it should be paid by individuals themselves.
Therefore
, I am going to elaborate about it in detail in the succeeding paragraphs.
First
 of all, I would like to
interepret
make sense of; assign a meaning to
interpret
 about
that
Suggestion
that's
 why management should sponsor for
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 citizens.I genuinely believe in it, because a recent study has found that, in India, more than 40% of
population
Suggestion
the population
 is not
literated
able to read and write
literate
 for the reason,
that is
 poverty. That's why,
council
Suggestion
the council
 must provide for needy people because education is not any privilege, it is a human right.
For instance
,
government
Suggestion
the government
 can build more and more public schools, colleges, etc., where education should be
costless
.
Secondly
, authority can
also
 help
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 residents by providing governmental hospitals or clinics. Because, as it is known that, nowadays, private hospitals have become pretty much expensive, even though, it's result rates are quite poorer than official ones.
However
, if I talk about governmental medical buildings,
such
 as PGI, in Chandigarh, Punjab and many more,
then
 they are really cheaper and reliable as compared to
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 ones. So,
administration
Suggestion
the administration
 should construct
such
 buildings more for folks' welfare.
Finally
, in conclusion, I reiterate my opinion by saying that
management
Suggestion
the management
 should support masses by providing complimentary studies and medical services because it is not everyone's cup of tea due to poverty and
also
 for their well being.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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