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Some people think that online reading materials are better for children. Others argue that traditional paper-based resources are better. Discuss and give your opinion.

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Technology has changed our life drastically, in recent years. Some people contend that study-material available on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 is more suitable for teenagers, while others opine that traditional paper based books and other sources are more advantageous. Notwithstanding,
this
 discourse will explore these two viewpoints, and
subsequently
 put forward my own perspective
accordingly
. Admittedly, the proponents of the view of using online sources for studying and gaining knowledge have their own justification. The rationale behind their argument might be that children can access any study material on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 at any
time any
Accept comma addition
time, any
 place as
internet
Suggestion
the internet
an internet
 provides the facility of selection and convenience.
Moreover
, they can not only refer reference books online, but can
also
 attend live classes online, which helps them to understand the subjects in more depth.
However
, taking a look from the flip side, could the contenders of the school of thought that postulate that conventional paper-based books and other sources plays a vital role in the development of the children be absolutely right? Certainly, the justification for their argument is much likely that the adolescents are more familiar with the hard copy of books than soft copies available on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
.
In addition
, they may find it difficult to find relevant information on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
, and sometimes they may expose themselves to malicious websites. According to a recent survey, to epitomize, students, who use paper-based material for learning, able to retain the information 50% more than they have studies from online sources. In conclusion, having explored both sides of the arguments, I reiterate that learning should not be restricted to any particular mode
such
 as online or offline.
However
, I consent to the hilt that using
hard copy
Suggestion
hard copies
a hard copy
 of books and other sources are more important and advantageous for the growth of the children in their studies.
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