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Band 4

Driving a car is the best mode of transport To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons and examples from your own experience. Write about 250 words.

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Some peoples think that going on a road by
car
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 is the greatest thing to do. In my mind using a
car
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 for transportation is not a good thing.
Firstly
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,
Car
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 can cost a lot of
money
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. You have to pay a lot of
money
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 to buy a
car
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 that it can be really expensive.
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, you have to take care of it which meant you have to spend more
money
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 for checking services or repairing services. To drive a
car
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 you have to pay for fuels, and
also
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 pay tax.
These
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This
 meant using a
car
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 as your transportation
is cost
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is costing
costs
 more
money
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 than
other choice
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the other choice
other choices
 of
transport
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.
This
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 is shown, if you chose
llike
prefer or wish to do something
like
public bus
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a public bus
public buses
for
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to
transport
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 you will pay less
money
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.
Secondly
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, Driving a
car
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 can provide
air
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 pollution.
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Car's engine
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The car's engine
produce
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produces
 smoke which can make
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air
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the air
 dirty and cause climate change. For examples, the smoke from the engine contain some bad gas like carbon
dioxide which
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dioxide, which
 is a kind gas that pollute the
air
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, and
also
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 make people can not breath well because there are no fresh
air
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, and it
effects
have an effect upon
affects
peoples
Suggestion
people's
 health, like lung problems, and even cause cancer. To sum up, Driving a
car
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 can cause
air
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 pollution, spend much
money
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, and
also
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effects
have an effect upon
affects
 health.
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 is meant driving a
car
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 for
transport
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 is not a good thing. For
recommentation
something (as a course of action) that is recommended as advisable
recommendations
recommendation
, you should use public
transport
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 or cycling to reduce payment and
air
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 pollution.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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