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*IELTS Training By Simiyu Paul_ People no longer use newspapers and television because The Internet plays the same role as them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most people argue that nowadays gazette and telecast are not in
use
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 anymore given that
internet
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 serves the exact role. I completely disagree with
this
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 statement because some people it is costly
use
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 the
internet
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also
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 it varies with age groups. Even though
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internet
Suggestion
the internet
 can be accessed at
anyplace
Suggestion
one-place
any place
 people still buy newspapers and watch television because most of the individuals from a less fortunate background would not be able to maintain the cost of easily accessible network
also
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 not
everyone
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 can afford to purchase a gadget with
internet
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 installation.
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, nowadays bundles are costly and for one to
use
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web
Suggestion
the web
 easily an individual needs money to purchase
also
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 installation of home wireless fidelity is expensive and not
everyone
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 can have the money to. Because of
this
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, television and newspapers are still vital in
this
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 era because not
everyone
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 can be able to afford the
internet
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.
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, it depends with the age group.
reason
a rational motive for a belief or action
Reason
 being,
majority
Suggestion
the majority
a majority
 of youths and middle age people surf the
internet
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 compared to elderly people l.
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 there are some young adults who still watch the TV
.
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.
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, old people love watching
news
Suggestion
the news
 from the telecast or read the gazette
furthermore
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 majority of them
urgue
present reasons and arguments
argue
argued
argues
 that
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use
Suggestion
the use
 of
internet
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 is a waste of time and it encourages laziness
.
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.
Thus
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, geriatrics prefer using television and newspapers to online networks In conclusion, even though
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internet
Suggestion
the internet
 is spreading widely newspapers and telecast are still in
use
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.
Bcause
Suggestion
Because
online
Suggestion
the online internet
internet
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 is expensive and not
everyone
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 can afford.
Moreover
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, elders consider old school methods
such
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 as watching
news
Suggestion
the news
 and reading newspapers
.
Accept space
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