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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels
There are drastic changes that have been noticed in the
environment
 over the years and one of them is a continual diminishing of fossil
fuels
hence
 if we ban
cars
 that burn fossil
fuel
then
 it would be a great step towards preserving the same. So, I
completely
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 in agreement with the idea that all
such
cars
 should be replaced with electric
cars
 as it would preserve fossil
fuels
 and save our
environment
 from hazardous gases. As we know
that
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with time, we are running out of fossil
fuels
 and it is very much possible that in the future we
would
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will
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 not see it. Preserving
fuels
 by adopting alternate methods like using electric
cars
 would be a great help. It will put a brake on the continuous depletion of
fuels
. Dubai is one
such
 example,
who
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 has already adopted the concept of electric
cars
 and effected a tremendous drop in the usage of fossil
fuel
 for transportation. The use of electric
cars
 over
cars
 that
uses
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 fossil
fuel
, not only preserves
fuel
 but saves our
environment
 from dangerous gases. As we know
that
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with the multiplication of automobiles, the
air
 quality index is
also
 diminishing at a similar rate and becoming poisonous day by day. The usage of electric
cars
 will be a commending step to control
air
 pollution. In Delhi,
last
 year’s AQI
observed
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 to be very poor,
hence
 Delhi govt. has introduced electric
cars
 in the city to control the
air
 pollution of the capital.
Although
, it is still in a very premature stage but
would
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will
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 be taking over completely in the next five years. I
would
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will
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 be concluding
this
 essay
by
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this
 statement that the use of electric
cars
 is the need of the hour to preserve fossil
fuels
 and save our
environment
 from
air
 pollution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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