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Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. Which do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Schools are a place where students learn and grow intellectually to become an invaluable asset of the society. Some argue that the teaching methods should be extended to be more entertaining, while there are others that believe that they are a temple of
education
 whose sole purpose is to educate using traditional methods. I strongly advocate with the idea of introducing new innovative and fun ways to learn at
school which
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school, which
 keeps the students interested in learning.
From
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For
 a long time, the schools have been following the conventional way of teaching which strictly involved formal classroom grooming added with dedicated classes for sports and arts. While
this
 type of
education
 has helped to get the best out of some students, there is
also
 a fraction of them who don't get impressed by teaching methods of
this
 kind, and neither excel
at
Suggestion
in
 sports or art classes, due to their limited accessibility. As time has progressed, there are new innovations that are coming up in schools in terms of educating methods. A blend of academics fused with a bit of fun and entertainment is the new norm these days. Research has shown that students tend to grasp things quickly if they are taught in a way that excites them.
For instance
, kindergarten students learn the alphabets quickly when it is associated with a rhyming tone, and primary school children learn a lot about their surroundings by watching an educational, yet fun-filled cartoons.
This
 not only results in faster learning, but
also
 encourages them to take
interest
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an interest
 in other non-academic activities like music, dramas, fashion and much more. To sum it up,
although
 few people think the typical class-room style
education
 is the best form of schooling, I strongly
favor
promote over another
favour
 the group of people who think that a fusion of entertainment and formal
education
 is more fruitful.

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