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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #scale
In the contemporary world, the concern for the degradation of
environment
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the environment
 is at the peak. It is commonly believed by some people that, environmental issues ought to be solved globally, while others are of opinion that they should be treated at national level. In
this
 essay, I
will explain the both
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will explain both the
 sides and
finally
 give my opinion. On the one hand, there are some environmental problems that should be dealt globally
such
 as global warming, black hole in
ozone layer
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the ozone layer
. So, all countries should unite and form a community to discuss and share ideas to resolve
this
.
Moreover
, problems can be solved easily and effectively by working together.
For instance
, recent fire in amazon and Australian forest was not only a one country
problem but
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problem, but
also
 a major concern for
whole world
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the whole world
 because millions of trees and animals were burned and turned into ashes. 30% of oxygen generates from the amazon forest.
However
, many developed came forward to help them financially and professionally to put
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
 the fire. It would be possible only if worked together. On
other hand
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the other hand
, some poor nations have their own internal problems like water scarcity, pollution and bulk amount of garbage. These kinds of issues should be resolved with the help of government and individuals of the same country.
For example
, in rural areas of poor countries like Uganda have water
problem it
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problem, it
 is not available to everyone and in few places available but polluted. With the help government and many NGO's donated money to install filtration plants to filter water. So, these kinds of issues should be solved nationally. To Conclude, in my opinion countries should all work together and help each other to resolve global issues and make
this
 world a better place to live.
However
, it is the responsibility of the nation and their individuals to improve their standard of living.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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