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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Healthcare is a fundamental need of the citizens of a
country
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 as
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 sector is related to their physiological and psychological well-being. Every year
government
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 spends a proportion of its budget on medical
care
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 and research. The purpose of doing
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 is to conduct empirical research on the vaccines and medication that can wipe out as many diseases as possible. With the advancement of medical
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, people now live longer and there are many advantages brought by the improvement in medical
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 and increased
life
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expectancy
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. In my opinion, these advantages outweigh the disadvantages. By improving the medical
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, a
country
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 will have fewer death cases caused by fatal diseases. With the advancement in technology, there are vaccines for many fatal diseases. The invention of the vaccine is all devoted to the
government
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 for spending some of the public money on medical
care
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. The longer
life
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expectancy
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 gives us the opportunity to serve our
country
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 for a longer period and
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 will let us enjoy our
life
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 here on Earth. Longer
life
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 is a symbol of the development of a
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. Many professionals like teachers, politician, researchers, mathematicians, writers and so on can contribute more to their matured and older ages. The longer
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expectancy
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 will let the grandparents spend more time their grandsons and granddaughters and that will let them teach values and traditions. The new generation would
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 learn past
history which
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history, which
 is important in shaping future of a
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.
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, there will be a scarcity of resources if
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expectancy
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 keeps on increasing. Nowadays, many countries face poverty and starvation as the food production is not enough to feed all the people around the globe. When people live longer, that means there will be more people refuse to retire at an early age.
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 will lead to unemployment for the young generation. Many fresh graduates will not be able to get a job only because experienced
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older
 people will hold those positions.
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Finally, government
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 and family will have to support
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 people and that would require a huge amount of money. In conclusion, longer
life
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expectancy
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 far outweighs the disadvantages.
Life
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 is precious and the
government
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 should spend more money on medical
care
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 in any way possible. Some of us might disagree that longer
life
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 is not
beneficial but
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beneficial, but
 all of us want to live longer and contribute to our family and
country
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 for as long as possible.
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