some people believe that unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of High School programs( for example working for charity improving the neighborhood for teaching sports to younger children) To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is the opinion of some people that volunteer services to the
community
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should be made as a compulsory component of High School programs. From my perspective, I agree that
this
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is the key to develop
sense
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a sense
of responsibility in young generation.
First
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of all, in terms of unpaid
community
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services if they are incorporated in
curriculum
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the curriculum
, it would have great impact on individual's practical life. Services like arranging funds for
Poor
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the poor
the Poor
and orphans develop not only sense of
integrity but
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integrity, but
this
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leads to character building and personal satisfaction as well. Giving education to students who do not have adequate resources greatly enhances
students
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students'
student's
abilities
thus
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maintaining learners' enthusiasm.
Furthermore
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, sharing experiences and teaching
children
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children's
sports could be a good source of increasing their experience and in
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way new players can be provided to the
society
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. There are,
however
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, other benefits
as a result
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of mandatory
community
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services to the students with regards to character building and personality
traits
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trait
development. If it is said, it would not be wrong that future leaders will be produced in
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manner.
For
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instance voluntary
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instance, voluntary
services provide an opportunity to learn communication skills, negotiation skills, time management along with other aspects of leadership traits.
Moreover
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,
sense
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the sense
a sense
of social accountability can be provided to the young generation.
This
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would influence their personal life on practical ground as well. They would be
successful entrepreneur
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a successful entrepreneur
in the future who will have a broad picture of
society
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. They will not think on
individual basis
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an individual basis
rather than for the benefit
for
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of
whole
society
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. Systems would be remarkably changed because of their attitude and skills. To recapitulate, I am
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
from
conviction
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the conviction
a conviction
that making unpaid
community
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services mandatory in
higher
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the high
school's curriculum
,
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,
would have
positive impact
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a positive impact
not only on personal grounds but on
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society level
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a societal level
societal level
as well.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fosters
  • compassion
  • empathy
  • civic engagement
  • practical skills
  • real-world experiences
  • invaluable
  • burden
  • impinging
  • logistical challenges
  • suitable placements
  • quality assurance
  • promote engagement
  • enthusiasm
  • meaningful
  • impactful
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